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From Time To Time.

Want to know the value of ten years?
Why don’t you try asking a newly divorced couple?
And see if they have any wasted tears.

Want to know the value of three years?
Why don’t you try asking an exhausted graduate?
And see if they are ready to start their career.

Want to know the value of nine months?
Why don’t you try asking a distraught mum?
And see if she misses her baby bump.

Want to know the value of four weeks?
Why don’t try asking someone who has been fired?
And see if they like prospect of living on the streets.

Want to know the value of an hour?
Why don’t you try asking someone who missed their alarm?
And see if they still had time to eat breakfast and shower.

Want to know the value of a minute?
Why don’t you try asking someone who missed the last train?
And see if they will be momentarily pushed to their limits.

No matter the amount,
Every single moment counts.
Even when the first day becomes every day
And all the seconds and minutes merge together.
These moments should still be appreciated in every way
Because time is something we can never truly measure.

Kela Lewis-Morin.
This was inspired by something my mother said to me which sparked a long trail of thoughts. I had trouble trying to put this down on paper and kept coming back to it. I hope you guys like it, this year I am looking to make my mark. So if you like my work please spread the word I cannot do it without all you guys. You are the reason why I believe I can make an impact in the first place. Thank you :)
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streetcamera17 Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Hello, I am from :icongrammarnazicritiques:

I found this piece very cleverly written. It's apparent you put a lot of thought and care into this piece and I commend you for that. Each verse is stripped down to the essential message and you never stray from the core thought of the poem. There is nothing to add or detract. You have gone straight to the point. The repeating pattern of how verses 1 to 6 begin is another clever use of language illustrating what you mean to say rather than simply telling the reader about it and serving to emphasize it. 

Repeating patterns usually blend the verses into each other, making the reader's eyes glaze over them and rendering the piece boring. But in this piece, each verse retains it's voice. Each verse gives you something to appreciate. It is as you said in the final verse.
"Even when the first day becomes every day
And all the seconds and minutes merge together.
These moments should still be appreciated in every way
Because time is something we can never truly measure"

Just to nitpick though.
- typo on verse 4: "...the prospect of living on the streets."
- and on verse 5, your consequence of someone missing their alarm was a skipped breakfast and shower. I find this a bit of a paltry problem especially compared to the seriousness and depth of the ones you used in the previous verses. There are several things that result from missing your alarm that are more affecting to your life than not being able to eat your toast.

Despite my nitpicking, I applaud this piece. It's intelligent and brings to light a topic that we usually rush past or are unmindful of in our lives despite intellectually knowing otherwise - that we should not let the sands of time simply slip us by, that we should let ourselves be cognizant of the way the grains fall and ebb away and to understand the value of every moment.
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AnythingObscure Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014
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LX-SA-97 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This is amazing!
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NanaThatha Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i love the last stanza! so true! Love Heart la in love I Love You Emote Emote - Kitty glomp Llama Emoji-03 (Sparkles) [V1] Llama Emoji-62 (Rawr I'll get you) [V3] Free Avatar - CupTardCake Pink love III just like heaven Sushi gif Lovely La love of music :monkehluv: La la la MilkDrop18 Bunny Emoji-18 (Shower Love) [V1] Bunny Emoji-10 (Loved) [V1] Bunny Kitty Emoji-01 (Lovely) [V1] Animated Love Monkey 
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This-Is-Someone-Else Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very wise and well constructed. I hope to see more like this from you.
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joshbmills Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014
My bruva

Your poetry is deep!

From another;-)
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PatternVSUser Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This hit hard, especially because I've been counting a lot (How much time I have to sleep, how much time left I have to hang with my friends, etc.).

That said, I think a better conclusion would be a verse in the style of the first ones, only something positive, something that makes a year last a second.

Straight to fav's.
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GoldenNocturna Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Yay for waxing philosophical without going too far into the philosophical! :happybounce: 
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angelenroute Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2014  Professional Writer
Hi Kela!  Sorry for the delay, always catching up on my critiques here for We-Poets.

Title is already in the field at top, so edit the text to delete it here.

And see if they like prospect of living on the streets.
***Add "the" before "prospect".

And see if they will be momentarily pushed to their limits.
***Fine as is, although I think "they'll" would work better than "they will", just to make the line a beat quicker to read.
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Overall?  I love this.  I think you wrote a very cool, meaning-filled poem you should be proud of!  Great job!

Sean
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JuanMilagro Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014
Generally speaking, I am not all that much on poetry, but I am adding this to my favourites folder.
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songsforever Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
well written sir. :trophy: Keep up the good work.
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Oralle08 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Really written in depth, and obviously thought through. It's beautiful!
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FarCryDreamer Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This was a beautiful read, and you had so many excellent examples. You've definitely made your mark with me.
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Lou-C-Pher Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree with everyone here, this is very well written and very though provocative at the same time :D 
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mightythedj23 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written; I like the fact that at first i was given a very sad/depressing tone, but in the end, i got more of an appreciative/glad tone.
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color-me-dreamy Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
such depth and so many great points, very well realised 
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CalleighBlack Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful, beautiful and so true. You can never get those lost moments back.
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014   Writer
Wow this is really beautiful! Excellent work
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christiahlove Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
This speaks the truth. Beautiful. Stunning job done here. :)
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Chapel-Horde Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is a wonderful piece of writing, and it speaks to a much more true and deeper nature of the illusion of time.
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cmcote1 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Beautiful, as well as very true good job
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MadxRhapsodyx17 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2014  Student Writer
A beautiful, powerful work of literary art.  :heart:
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