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Have you ever questioned?



Life's compulsory regulations and lessons.

The processes that are automatically assumed.

These social facts that are hereditarily consumed.

This holy reasoning that can never be disputed.

A uniformed mass that are complacently suited.


Have you ever questioned?


Why things are, the way they are.

How one out of eight planets in this solar system,

Facilitates life which revolves around an incandescent star.

How on this one planet both good and evil thrive.

And god's subjects commit sinful, selfish acts just to survive.

How the quantity of printed paper assures your material stability.

And the lack of it limits your social and mental mobility.

How our faith is based in an invisible, omnipotent director.

And tragedies occur despite the presence of  this all knowing protector.


Have you ever questioned?


Everything that you know and believe.

And that what ever the human mind can conjure.

It can actually achieve.


Have you ever questioned?


Whether we eternally stay or unpredictably leave.

And these mutual, mortal objectives.

Could have been manipulated to restrict and deceive.


Have you ever questioned?


That as human beings we have not yet discovered our purpose.

That as human beings we have not found our worth yet.

That in this world full of corruption, confusion and despair

It is possible to make the pain hurt less.


Kela lewis-morin
This is kind of a rambling poem just some thoughts on my mind. I hope you like it and I hope its not to wordy I just happen to know alot of words lol Just some questions that I keep asking myself I guess maybe I'm afraid to find out the answers anyway let me know what you think :)
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H-A-Cooke Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Vision:

The poem's title is a strong point. I think you should omit the questions from reoccurring in the piece and let the content of the poem spark questions in the minds of the readers.

Originality:

The last line really flip-flops the meaning of the poem, which gives it a strong theme. The want for change and the uncertainty of how one fit's into the world. But, I think the last line also functions as an answer to the questions being asked.

Technique:

I would suggest omitting the lines that are the question "Have you ever questioned?" Instead put two lines of white space between each stanza. White space can function as a segue between thoughts, and that way you rhyme scheme won't be unnecessarily broken up by the questions.
Impact:

The transition from small-scale personal questions to larger scale philosophical ones gives the poem levels that anyone can relate to. The biggest point of impact is the overall question "How does one fit into the larger scheme of things?" I think that question will get a lot of people thinking.
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Writer
ahh thank you for the advice and evaluation :) it means a lot and I know there is a lot for me to work on but I guess in time I will get better
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H-A-Cooke Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. I can tell you a secret.. I've been writing for 11 years and I still learn new pointers about craft. Writing is constant learning, but it's also about deciding which parts of your poem you want to change and which parts you'd prefer to keep the same.
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quickwing23 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why yes I have... good question.
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Writer
ahh good at least I'm not the only one lol thank you :) please feel free to check out some of my other works anytime if you like :)
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Ringtail101 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Student Writer
nicely done! very true in meaning.
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Writer
ahhh thank you :) please feel free to check out some of my other works anytime if you like :)
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Ringtail101 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2012  Student Writer
sweet, i'll do that sometime lol
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Bemari Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
That's something to think about.

Well written poem. :)
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Writer
ahh thank you :) i'm glad you like it :)
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