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L.O.V.E.

It swallows you whole,
Exceeds your control.
Apprehends your soul,
Until it has taken its toll.

It’s an overwhelming feeling.
That is made to be appealing
And you can’t help revealing,
The doubts you are concealing.

It’s an undefined dimple
And a well known jingle.
But only when you are single
Does it all seem so simple.

It is one of life’s many gifts,
That empowers and uplifts
And can lead you adrift.
Should you miss your shift.

It is impossible to describe it.
It is impossible to fight it.
Because once it is ignited
And once you have tried it.

It will take your independence.
You will become used to its presence.
You will become addicted to its essence
And include it at the end of your every sentence.

It exists even in the hearts of its haters.
It is a taste even they will savour
And although its duration wavers.
There will never be a feeling that is greater.

It is...
Everything I have said and more.
I am merely repeating what you already know.
Tears of pain and pleasure are promised to pour.
That is just the way these things are meant to go.


Kela Lewis-Morin.
Something I wrote tonight and as soon as I wrote it I thought eurgh it sounds so cliche and cheesy lol but it was in my head and I just had to write it down and I just hate leaving things unfinished. I wanted this piece to be as simple as possible with basic rhymes but I read over and I just think it sounds to basic. I hope you guys like it anyway and I hope it makes sense lol
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chloe7044 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
OmgEmoticon - TT.TT 
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
You truly are a brilliant writer! I am humbled.
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PrincessofDreams123 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, I'm tearing up. That was so beautiful, and yet so true! You just said what I have always wanted to say and just couldn't find the right words for... Thanks for saying it.
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Xerolien Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great rhymes.

A little constructive critique though.
Don't write love to start with it's quite obvious through the piece and writing it kills the need for interpretation and thereby the curiosity and excitement.
It would do much better on its own.
Also, it's a shame that the last verse has 5 lines in steed of just 4 as all the others, ruins the composition, the flow and the rhyme.

Keep up the good work :)
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Littlelinguist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Student Writer
Simple yet includes even the minutest details. Thumbs up!! :)
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Bemari Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Good one!
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tsukimayo Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Student Writer
my poem. sorry
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tsukimayo Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Student Writer
You should look up poem "love." it's a bit similar. But your's has more emotion weaved into it
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm a guy and I like it!
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Cyan-Airus Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's not cheesy or cliche, it's simple and beautiful.
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ReizYouUp Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
There's no way that this is cheesy. Trust me, there are a lot of artitst who loathe there own work, much like a person who does not think they look pretty, but really does.
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jtcheney Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wouldn't call it cheesy either. Simplistic. Minimalistic, but not cheesy or cliche.
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SkyRayne-CreedSister Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013  Student Writer
It's not cheesey. It's beautiful. Basic doesn't describe it in my eyes.
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