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Living a Lie.

You say things you don't mean when you're angry.
You call me a waste of space and that you can't stand me.

When the dust settles you say you don't mean it.
You say I should know better than to believe it.

As usual I foolishly upkeep your illusive hold on me.
I allow you to mute my thoughts and take control of me.

You promise and reassure me that it will never happen again.
That this is the last time and you will put it all to an end.

But I know promises only comfort fools,
Who readily allow others to pull the wool

Over our eyes because it is easier to swallow the lies.
Can it be a mistake if it happens more than twice?
Despite my preaching I can never take my own advice.

I've realised that this aggression is a part of you
And because I can never dare to part from you.
I have to believe the love you have for me is true.

Sometimes you have to take a lie not for what it is
But for the truth and reality it suspends.

Withdraw your vengeful tongue and revert it into a kiss.
So we can all carry on living in this false pretence.

Kela Lewis-Morin
Something I wrote last night whilst lying in bed and decided to map it out on my blackberry lol It was more like a conversation with myself in order to understand while people live in certain situations. When deep down they know it is a lie and the negatives out weight the positives. I hope it works and I hope it makes sense lol Let me know what you think guys :)
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viikable Aug 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This world is just one big lie.
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Cygnicantus Jul 22, 2013  Student Traditional Artist

"Withdraw your vengeful tongue and revert it into a kiss." is my favourite line ♥

Very moving....

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:iconlindartz:
Well done! ^^
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magic6jewls Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Hi, I'm a critic from :thecritiquables:

It's nice that you gave this poem a rhyming scheme. Also, the feeling of being verbally and emotionally abused is a very relatable topic.

However, I'd just like to say that "illusive" is probably not the right word to use. "Elusive" seems more right. Although that'd be your call to make.

Clichéd poem but it really pulls out the emotions in the reader.

Continue writing!
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NykiiLynn Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i lived this :\ after five years i finally said enoughs enough.
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Kritone Jan 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Hmm... a sad reality we live with in life.
Beautifully put into a short poem.
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dkenreeks Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very good...
Like the bit of hope at the end.
--RKJ
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princepalmi Jan 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This be incredibly good...some of the constructions in it are wonderful, the flow is superb and some of the lines that cross, wow, just wow.
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rEtrOspeXX Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I know exactly what you mean, makes perfect sense to me.
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Shinobibatchi Jan 10, 2013  Professional Writer
It hits me pretty close to home. I just really got out of this kind of thing, and it feels honestly like a good conversation, and holds a lot of truth to it.
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