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Everyone is too wrapped in their own lives to even care about yours.


                                 But what they fail to remember is that this earth is only the first of many floors.



Tears cascade, smiles appear and fade while the universe continues to ignore,



                                               As they impatiently knock and wait outside life's man made divisible door.



So when they become to self involved in the successes of their own cause.


                                                                   
                                                                   Just remember this world,

                                                                   This universe,

                                                                   This eternal existence

                                                                   Is worth so much more.



Kela Lewis-Morin
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Something I have had saved in my blackberry for awhile partly because I did not like but I could not get it out of my head lol I just got to thinking how big this universe and how much we do not actually know. Yet we sit here worrying about careers and problems with life that we initially created. I think to much I guess my head is constantly in the clouds lol I hope you guys like it and I hope it works. :)
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:iconazzurknightheretic:
Hey ! Play some video games and relax :) [link]
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~8thful Jan 11, 2013   Writer
Keep it up, you have tons of talent
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~kyokomogami333 Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
This is amazing beyond words... wow
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:iconconstantmirror:
I've written several pieces just like this. I love it!
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~songsforever Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautifully written. Well done and keep up the good work!
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:iconirrationalrationale:
This is nice work. To help you out, I'd like to point out a grammatical error.
In this line, to should be replaced with too.
"So when they become :star: too :star: self involved in the successes of their own cause."
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:iconmagicaljoey:
I enjoyed reading this, but the one thing that irritated me was the format. I know DA is a format-munching monster, but perhaps not having the 'second' lines on the RHS might make it look better?
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~InkySnowflakes Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this. It flows well, and the end result is definitely thought-provoking. It honestly is strange to think how, as a human race, we're so worried about all these things which we've created, and therefore should have control over -- something which you've done a brilliant job of highlighting. What a magnificent piece of writing!
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~themeepynerd Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A wise woman once said, "If it doesn't make any sense, it's a good poem." What she meant was that the best poems are the hardest to understand and the most deep. Therefore, bravo!

Descriptions are really nice, though, and the meaning that you told me was much better than the ambiguous meaning I was trying to find XD
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!RemusExs Dec 14, 2012  Student
thats really good! well done!
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