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Everyone is too wrapped in their own lives to even care about yours.

                                 But what they fail to remember is that this earth is only the first of many floors.

Tears cascade, smiles appear and fade while the universe continues to ignore,

                                               As they impatiently knock and wait outside life's man made divisible door.

So when they become to self involved in the successes of their own cause.

                                                                   Just remember this world,

                                                                   This universe,

                                                                   This eternal existence

                                                                   Is worth so much more.

Kela Lewis-Morin
Something I have had saved in my blackberry for awhile partly because I did not like but I could not get it out of my head lol I just got to thinking how big this universe and how much we do not actually know. Yet we sit here worrying about careers and problems with life that we initially created. I think to much I guess my head is constantly in the clouds lol I hope you guys like it and I hope it works. :)
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deeclear Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this!!
AzzurKnightHeretic Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013
Hey ! Play some video games and relax :) [link]
8thful Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2013   Writer
Keep it up, you have tons of talent
kyokomogami333 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
This is amazing beyond words... wow
ConstantMirror Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
I've written several pieces just like this. I love it!
songsforever Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is beautifully written. Well done and keep up the good work!
irrationalrationale Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012
This is nice work. To help you out, I'd like to point out a grammatical error.
In this line, to should be replaced with too.
"So when they become :star: too :star: self involved in the successes of their own cause."
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012   Writer
I enjoyed reading this, but the one thing that irritated me was the format. I know DA is a format-munching monster, but perhaps not having the 'second' lines on the RHS might make it look better?
InkySnowflakes Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoyed this. It flows well, and the end result is definitely thought-provoking. It honestly is strange to think how, as a human race, we're so worried about all these things which we've created, and therefore should have control over -- something which you've done a brilliant job of highlighting. What a magnificent piece of writing!
themeepynerd Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A wise woman once said, "If it doesn't make any sense, it's a good poem." What she meant was that the best poems are the hardest to understand and the most deep. Therefore, bravo!

Descriptions are really nice, though, and the meaning that you told me was much better than the ambiguous meaning I was trying to find XD
RemusExs Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student
thats really good! well done!
Traumkratzer Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Ah, yes, this ephemeral trip down on earth. A good reminder to take ourselves not so seriously and to think about what really matters. And of course, that this voyage down on this planet ends for everyone.
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is cool stuff...
isabella-angel Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very true
Legrandzilla Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I wrote a poem called Obsolete a while back and posted it too, at a time when I felt obsolete myself..I really like yours. Would you look at mine sometime and tell me what you think? Mine is a lot different, yours is cool and unique, even how you spaced the text..
cyberdjango Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
This is good. I can't see the stars at night in the city. They always reminded me of how insignificant everything down here really is.[link]
Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A good thing to remember :).
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