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Perfection.


She lodges her fingers down her throat.

Clasping onto the wall as she recklessly chokes.

She reinserts her fingers back in forcibly.

Deliriously trying to make her body thinner.

She swoons and slumps to the floor nauseously

As she attempts to regurgitate her dinner.

Her throat aches as she screeches out coarsely,

With her hand covering the image in the mirror.

Her head now rests on the on the rim of the toilet seat.

She wants to eat but she just has not got in her.

She desperately begins to scream out inaudibly.

Her mouth now tastes of something pulpy and bitter.

She examines the red color of the fluid cautiously.

Realizing that she has become too focused on her figure.

Her friend then knocks on the door thoughtfully.

She shouts out, "I'm okay I don't need a baby sitter."

Her friend continues to knock and waits outside awkwardly

Replying, "You promised me, you said that you are not a quitter"

The tap begins to run as she disguises her cough distortedly.

She knows her friend is right but she refuses to consider

Her opinion as attainable because she sees herself as morbidly

Overweight and that she must become thinner and fitter.


The media have forced her to become paranoid.

Surrounded by all of these perfectly sculptured people.

These portraits have become impossible to avoid

Which is why she can never see herself as an equal.


Kela Lewis-Morin
Something I wrote well these past two days inspired by the extremes people will go to in order to achieve the perfect body. I tried to keep flow consistent and keep the rhyme intact and for the record distortedly is a word I don't know why it is not recognizing it lol but anyway I hope you guys like and I hope it works.
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dumbplum66 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Love the message it gives. Sadly while reading this I was listening to a song called perfect... oops.
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ConstantMirror Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
It's a vivid image, but there is nothing out of the ordinary, given the premise. Still powerful.
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iKestrel Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist
I pity the people who do things like that.
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow. It makes one think of all the struggles with finding the perfect body.
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theLUsir Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You have a few lines that don't rhyme, mere aesthetics, and you have an odd rhythm throughout the poem. This could irritate a reader.

The fact that most of our adverbs are at the end of a sentence does promote the semblance of structure, though.

Either way, I love the imagery and sympathy you invoke. Great job!
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roselynedwards Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
I agree the rhythm was kind of odd and annoying at first, but I got used to it as i read on.
The theme is thought provoking.
I especially liked the lines

She shouts out, "I'm okay I don't need a baby sitter."

Her friend continues to knock and waits outside awkwardly

Replying, "You promised me, you said that you are not a quitter"
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infernus8sit4amet6 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) Good work.
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redconvoy Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
People like that either have that disorder like you described or they are not happy with themselves. Not all of us could be model thin and half of those pictures are photoshopped. They used to be and probably continue to be air brushed. I know friends who went through liposuction. I think they need to be happy and accepting of themselves. Good job.
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crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
this is an amazing piece. the message is loud and clear, and this is really well written. i hope to see more.
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malcomblack Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nobody's perfect so just trying to be the best you can. of course exercise helps a lot to
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Lunawerewolfy Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
What people sometimes don't realise, and might never grasp is that perfection isn't a thing. It isn't something you can touch or model yourself against. It's a mindset. It's something if you believe it's true it is. It's something beautiful if you don't misunderstand it. And the cold hard truth is that whatever you do, someone's gonna hate you for it, and as long as it's not you, you can ignore it. It gets better, it always does.

Change the way you see, not the way you look.
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i totally know where this is coming from. Just recently i was anorexic, except when my over analyzing parents forced me to eat, and i would promptly throw it all up. I know i weigh all of 114 pounds, but i dont feel like it. I dont look in full length mirrors. I cant. I can only look in a mirror if its from the chest up. I was in the locker room at gym and i accidently caught my reflection in the mirror, and i was so absolutly disgusted with how i look, that i just sat down and cried. And cried. And cried. Everytime i eat or drink anything, i feel disgusting and i just wanna get rid of it. I see all these people where i can wrap my arms twice around them. And you cant do that with me.

This is beautifully written. The emotions are outstanding, the message is clear and illustrated beautifully. You did an amazing job.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
... I stopped reading after the "toilet seat" line... That's a compliment by the way.

You got your point with the opening. And only those who're dead inside would deny that Perfection is relative, not absolute.
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Really tears your heart out when you realise how far people will go to achieve that so-called "perfect" body. A good diet and exercise will do just fine, but what people fail to realise is that your genetic code has more or less mapped you out from the day you were born.

And of course, just because you achieve this "perfection" doesn't mean everyone on this Earth accepts it as such. The vicious cycle starts all over again... and my guess is it leads to suicide eventually.

That's perhaps one of the main reasons why I hate our media so much... they are so focused on the trivial, mind-numbing garbage in our lives that we fail to understand the most serious issues of our life, happening right now as we speak.

All that aside though, I really enjoyed this piece and hope you can one day become popular enough to spread messages like this around the globe. Everyone needs to know about stuff like this... end of story. :)
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh bulimia isn't pleasant (understatement of the century I know). I've never had to deal with any of this thankfully, just something to listen about in Psychology or Sociology, but yes its disturbing.
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random-neko-chan Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
It is pretty crazy how people are so obsessive over their bodies and appearances. It's destroying people! It's disgusting! D:
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