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Reassuring Pride.



I can do this on my own.

I don't require your assistance.


                                                                     I'm not questioning whether your capable.

                                                        Why the hostility and the unsighted resistance?


Why cant you just leave me alone?

I don't admire or warrant your persistence.


                                                                Stop making yourself emotionally unavailable.

                                                          I pose no possible threat to your existence.


Spare me the well rehearsed pretentious, passive tone.

Your attempts are futile, they wont work in this instance.


                                                                     So are you saying there's nothing I can do or say at all?

                                                           What can I do when your communicating from a detached distance.


You walk away and allow me to cope with my own predicaments.

I've gotten this far by myself, I will find a way to solve them.


                                                                       Why do you feel like your alone in all of this?

                                                             Do you see me as a friend or a foe then?


I apologise if I seem agitated and belligerent .

But I will tell you the same thing I told them.


                                                                        My comforting hand will never fashion a fist

                                                              Having someone help you doesn't mean you failed my old friend.



This is my battle friend I must be diligent and vigilant.

We all are destined to be born and  die alone in the end.



                                                                          I agree all our names are on life's brief episodic list.

                                                                  I know your pride is not enabling you to comprehend.


My pride is all I have I will not allow myself to be your sycophant.

My problems are not for you or for any other to mend.



Having someone help you doesn't mean you failed.


It just means that your not isolated or abandoned.


Your only slightly derailed it is still possible to prevail.


Guiding you back on to the right path is my job as your companion.



                                                                                    I want to accept your hand but I don't know how to.


                                                                             I appreciate all of your encouragement and support.


                                                                      I want to give in and share this burden but I'm to proud to.


                                                             The fact that you are there helps ease my thoughts.



There will come a day where you will need me the most.


                 Whenever you want me, just know what I will always be close.


                                      With a shoulder to cry on and open arms.


                                                Ready to protect and defend you against any harm.


Kela lewis-morin
I was worried this one would sound cliche and to typical but it in my head it seemed like the only way I could illustrate it. I wanted to focus on pride and how it limits an individual cuts them of from clarity or and help. I chose to mix up the rhyme a little and alternate it with each verse kind of long to think of all them rhyming words lol anyway I hope you like it let me know what you think guys :)
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tinaaw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoyed how it seemed to be two conversations and the form of the poem.

Thanks
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ExaltedPoet Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:dalove: I love how it flows its like I can hear someone talking about it in my head the way its supposed to sound. :squee:
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FollowTheShadows Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Interesting and very...hmm if I could find a better word for how thoughtful and how it just shows who we are in the inside, then it wouldn't describe a fraction of what you have written. But I'm just a person without much pride in many things. Though the way you wrote, this speaks out a good story. I can't help but think how this poem truly connects with us, with what I believe is a double play of voices. We have two voices alright, or I may just be speaking my mind.
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
gah! SO MANY BIG WORDS!!!! *grabds head and screams* :)
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NikkiXKaila Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
**you're
**you're
**you're
**you're
**you're
**too

The poem is really vague and the rhyme scheme seems really off. You also seem to contradict yourself and I have no clue what the overall point of this poem was.
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InAugustDust Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012   Writer
Very creative<3 I like it
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unicornomics Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012   General Artist
Good
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh abab scheme (I forget what its actually called ^^;) rather then couplets it works. And I like the feeling of the two talking to each other
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EricaMarie15 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
oh this is good! :)
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