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The Situation.

She visits the store every Saturday.
Her children rampantly destroy the aisles,
She struggles to maintain control.
Judgemental eyes question her parental prowess.
Her hair untidily secured by thinning beige band.
Her fingernails are notable jagged and ink like.
She devotedly monitors her offspring,
Her shoulders overburdened from the load.
She continuously checks her phone for a message,
That she knows will never come.

He wakes up downheartedly,
Ignoring the several missed calls on his phone.
His neck covered in purple blemishes.
A young female wearing his striped shirt turns over,
He nudges her hand of his exposed chest.
He reaches for his pack of cigarettes and a wrinkled photo.
Looks up the magnolia pasted ceiling,
Puffs out a shroud of fumes to hide his liquefied eyes.
Finally acknowledging his flashing mobile.
Begins to dial a number he knows he will never call.

Why does he do it?
She just can't figure out.
It went from kisses from the lips.
To the mouth being manipulated to shout.

Their combined tears will eventually tear them apart.
He wants to forget because he can remember a time when they were perfect.
Is it to late for them to try and re-start?
Or has the relation-ship wrecked.

Kela lewis-morin
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something i wrote today after work when i saw a lady in my store struggling to control her children constantly looking at her phone and my imagination just went away with me lol. i tend to imagine what there lives are like kinda weird but hey lol hope it works :) let me know what you think guys :)
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!meta-exposure Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh! So much feeling in this! Like, I'm looking at her, too, and I just want to... hug her and tell her it will all be okay.

Also, "relation-ship wreck". Brilliant, mate. Well done!
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*KelaLewis-Morin Mar 4, 2012  Student Writer
awwwh thank you :) glad you liked it you can hug her if you want :) awwwh thats sweet lol thank you for your compliment
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~pianokeys457 Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, poor lady. :c
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*KelaLewis-Morin Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
i know :( this happens alot in reality
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:iconliedy:
Hi! I thought the first two parts were brilliant, but I don't think the ending is at par. It seems a bit rushed, and it doesn't really provoke as much thought as I hoped for, when the body was so good.
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*KelaLewis-Morin Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
ahhhh thanks for the advice :) glad you liked it
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~StArMigEt Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous, powerful, tragic piece. Nuf said haha :love:
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*KelaLewis-Morin Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
awwwh lool thank you so much that made me smile glad you like it
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