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The Highway To Success.


Caught in the same cycle,
Venturing on different routes.
Dealt an equal amount of cards,
All attempting to follow suit.
Each path is only built for one,
So the other is destined to lose.
The hungry and the blind are equal,
But who is misleading who?
Multiple mouths moulded to lie,
Resulting in many truths.

So when you offer me....
A way out of this unfair world.
An opportunity to avoid the sheer cold.
To have the freedom of being brave innovative and bold.
A place where all of my dreams are promised to unfold.
Where all of my dreams will be mine to grasp and hold.
And my story will become an infamous legend brought and told.

How can I believe any of your declarations?
When I know this will be a short lived collaboration.
However I yearn for your belief and your validation.
I appreciate you taking my dream in to consideration.
But you see we are on the same path of self gratification.
If the path was to decrease, you will dismiss me with no hesitation.
It's not because you are deliberately seeking to further your own vocation.
It's just how we are; consider it another part of our instinctive adaptation.
                                     

Kela Lewis-Morin
Something I wrote today inspired by the many false promises and claims I have received. People say they will help and that have the tools to aid you but sometimes they are just looking out for themselves. I used to think it was just a selfish trait in a few individuals but now I just think it is a part of our nature. I tried to use an irregular rhyme scheme focusing on a consistent flow that also makes sense. I hope it works and I hope you guys like it.
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winter33 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I loved this, it's going in my favourites. :D
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Scaretted Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconbravoplz: amazing!
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Chapel-Horde Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your wording on this poem is excellent, especially toward the end. So many people writing poetry settle for one syllable ABABA type of schemes.
In fact I'm somewhat guilty of this myself. This poem serves to remind that the English language is rich and for the taking if one is willing to play with it.
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princesssudi Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Professional Writer
Very awesome poem. It is sad that there are those like that. Very powerful poem.
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Love it
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Shinitora12 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how you made the the third stanza.
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