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The Truth






Nothing in this world…                                                    will ever be equal.









That is why bad things happen…                                               to good people.









That is why death is life's…                                                    only sequel.











Kela lewis-morin
I tried to go for simplicity with this peice. Using a minimal amount in hope that it will have a bigger impact. This actually came to me in a dream and I thought I might aswell write it down lol. I hope it works and I hope you guys like it :) Let me know what you think.
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Jomoku Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
You ever walk a tombstone

Like you wish the life would hit.

the vacant smokes around, the sorrow and vast space...

the pits of earth around you, coughing their melancholy,

the trees above whispering to each other they will be gone too.

Ever look to the sun, say its just a dying rose, you have lost the coming moon every little bit.

You ever walk a tombstone , watch the earth as it shatters above, be pelted by the rains...

the dancing pain like a triumph.

Gritting your teeth, did you taste the earth, where the corpses lay.

Where there teeth would nourish , where there hearts were clutched..

every see the horizon, before the light gives out, that opaque understanding.

ever greet the darkness, the echoes of the surround..

see the gold , the red, and the jealous crowns.

the whispering oaks around you, as they gather light.

we willow and widow each other , like ants

bees at the top of a flower grasping the succor of the night...

ever bless the darkness, you mind knows...

That tombstone you dance upon, the cheery wind chimes nearby , the friendly waving trees. 

Ever walk a meadow , dark in the forest near, wonder if there bodies, came and went here.

Some would say a fever sits on a stone, where I lay...

If i told you i was standing... even dancing.................

what would you.....
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SEwing0109 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ii like the spacng as much as the wods. Really emphasizes the simplcity you were going for (and achieved).
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lu40953 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student General Artist
the truth runs very deep. :D I like it! it's amazing!
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KirtZJ Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012   Writer
The bitter truth.
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Zarthor563 Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! Simple things are often the most powerful, and definitely the most memorable.
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writingbubble Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
yup, it works pretty well, if you ask me ;)
love this!
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kyubicully Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
simplifying something is the best way to get something across
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kyubicully Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this is very good and equally true.
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CemeBlack Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
i love it very much
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ArcoIris-Gato Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice done =)
Simple, but so meaningfull! ><
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kartiksharma Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Student General Artist
This is pretty amazing!!
Good Job done there! :)


If it interests you, please have a look : [link]
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PanicDicedPanda Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I personally do like the spaces. I like it when poems make a shape or have a different look to them. It definitely gives it a special vibe to them that makes them worth looking at.
I really liked this one. ^ ^
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Riarri Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Simple, sweet, and to the point. It was a nice read~

I'm not a fan of the large spaces in-between, but it's only my preference and could have something to do with dA's layout.
I'm willing to bet it would look much better, possibly the way you intended it would, on a different layout.

However, there was a very strong impact, and was a good job~ ^-^
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Kaida-22 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Simple is beautiful...great job!
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh this definitely is very simple, I like it :)
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Laurabstar Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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