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Wasted Words.

We wait for the last possible moment.
Even when confronting our opponents.

To reveal,
How we truly feel.

We hide behind our counterfeit expressions.
Conceal and contain our countless confessions.

Failing to announce,
What our mouths long to pronounce.

We purposely squander opportunities.
Maintaining our positions within our communities.

Avoiding any disclosure,
Reducing the risk of exposure.

We use humour to dilute what we actually say.
Because the truth does not have to be revealed today.

We know there always is a tomorrow,
So today has not got to be filled with sorrow.

We wait and wait.

                Stall and prolong.

                                  Until it’s too late

                                                         And the moment has gone.

                                There is never a convenient time.

                            For us to say what is really on our minds.

                               It takes the sight of a death bed.

                              For us to say what needs to be said.

Kela Lewis-Morin
I have not finished any work in a while because I have been working so much lately but my blackberry is filled with ideas lol. I wrote this one last night when I could not sleep, I wanted it to be simplistic and mess around with the form just to break away from conventionality. This was inspired by the amount of words I waste myself and just dancing around the truth because I know I have not got to say how I feel right now. I hope this works and I hope you guys like it :)
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WushuSpice Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
..this is exactly how I have been feeling for a long time. Thank you for making this and putting it out there--I needed to hear something like this^^
LindArtz Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
This is....outstanding!!!

From experience I've learnt these things, especially the last line, although I was blessed to have that work in my favor.

I hope your reader's all take these words very seriously to heart. :heart:
NeoPaladinOfLight Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Dude, on the real, you're like my new favorite. Keepin' it simple and clean, but making it cuts deep.
sunny1212 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I really enjoyed reading this <333
NaturalDreamer18 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
Another lovely piece. I really like the flow of this poem. Very smooth and at a right pace. May I also narrate this piece? I await your reply.

Have a good day. ^^
StoryWeaver29 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013
Wow. At first I thought it was talking about not standing up for yourself when you're being picked on. But once I got to the end, I read that it means you don't say the things that should have been said to the people you care about.

I think that these past few poems have been the best I've read of yours, in my opinion. :D
Bittersweet-Kat Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem has a good flow :) The way its presented works very well for it too. At the end the creeping effect does give it an extra elegance.

Some lines are a little off syllable count wise. The one I picked up on was:

"We use humour to dilute what we actually say.
Because the truth does not have to be revealed today.

We know there always is a tomorrow,
So today has not got to be filled with sorrow."

Something I am guilty of too, is putting too many connectives in a word. These lines are a little awkward because of the same problem. More so with the latter two lines, the last line can simply be said "So today is not filled with sorrow", but that obviously upsets your syllables. So instead, maybe substituting words or adding more description? A suggestion would be "So today's not cracked, and filled with sorrow", or "So today's not filled with pain and sorrow". If you don't like the use of "today's" instead of "today is", then there is always "so today is not lost, filled with sorrow". I have noticed you don't tend to use words like "isn't", "doesn't", or anything shortened like that, and I don't know if that's a personal writing choice, so I'll leave that point open with you.

Aside from those very nit picky things, I think its awesome :meow: Your work is a joy to read :3 and I hope you don't mind the critique :heart:
poeknowsprose Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
I really liked the flow and meaning of this. It truly is really difficult to say what you mean sometimes, and that can really end up being a big problem.
linwriter Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Love perfectly expressed! :)
Late night writing of ideas when can not sleep produces good work..I find this true so often with those of us that write. :)
Thorns-And-Roses Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
I love this! Quite beautiful and oh so true. Great work!
Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It takes a lot of courage to say what one thinks, in some ways. I liked the flow and the rhyme works with it.
UkeBug Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
camilah Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Love it,love it:heart:
Shurely Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing poem. I thoroughly enjoyed reading that.
Shadowdew6 Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, this has a great rhythm to it, I would personally change a couple of little words that slow the pace but that's just me. Great work!
wow, how do you get good at rhyming like that?

cerealnovels Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Very distinct rhythm in this. It is thought producing and provoking.
Jae10 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, i thought this was pretty neat and well written - plus, it's very true. Good poem^^
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